Once upon a time,in the beautiful forest, there was a big lion and a fat and small mouse.
The lion was so so big and the fat and small mouse was so cute.One sunny day,the big lion caught the fat and small mouse.Then,the fat and small mouse cried,“Don’t eat me!I can help you!Please let me go!”The lion thought,“You are too small.You cannot help me.”So,the big lion let him go.
The next sunny day,the big lion was in the big net.It could not came out,“Help!Help!”the big lion shouted.Then,the fat and small mouse heard the big lion shouted,“Help!Help!Who can help me?”The fat and small mouse thought“?I should help him.”Next,the fat and small mouse used his teeth to bite the net.The big lion came out.
Finally.the big lioncame out and said,“Thank you.”to the fat and small mouse.The big lion learnt don’t look down on other.
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